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There once was a boy and a girl. They were twins and looked exactly alike. they both had ash blond hair and blue eyes. They lived in a little town in a forest. It was always peacefull and quiet. Until the hunter came…
Maru and Koda were walking in the forest. They were talking about their swimtrip in the lake. When they came to town their cheerfull mood faded away. It was quiet.. to quiet. Koda grabbed Maru’s hand and pulled behind his large back. Slowly he walked towards their house with Maru right behind him. What they saw in their house made Maru scream while Koda turned white. Their mother lay on the ground in her own blood. She was dead. Maru screamed and cried. She begged her mother to come back.
Ofcourse that didn’t happen.
Koda looked around in the town. Everyone fled except some people. The people who stayed all died. While Koda was looking around Maru found a letter in her mothers hand. She opened it and read these Lines:
Dear Maru and Koda,
Please run away from here it is not safe! The hunter can’t get to you! After this letter you will get another 2. Search fort hem!
And so the two ran as far as they could.
After 4 months they found the second letter. A big black crow held it. Koda was able to grab it. it said this:

The light will fade away,
The darkness will come closer.
Beware beware,
Don’t let him catch you!

Then the paper burned away with black flames. Maru screamed while the flames went all over Koda’s body. His once blond hair turned into velvet night sky black. His beautifull blue eyes became as grey. Koda saw himself in the water of the River. He gasped for breath and then hef led into the shadow. Maru was alone now. She searched for him but the shadows made him invisible.
After another 4 months she found the third and last letter. A little golden yellow bird was holding it. Maru grabbed it and read:

The light will be stronger,
The darkness will fade away.
Beware beware,
Don’t let him get you!

After reading a golden light went trough her body. Her blonde hair became shining gold. Her blue eyes became liquid amber.
She heard gunshots. It was him! The Hunter! So on her instincts she hid herself in the dazing sunlight.
And so they stayed that way. Koda merged with the shadow for allmost a year. There grew black wings on his back. Maru hid in the sun- and moonlight for allmost a year. She gained golden wings.
And finally after 2 years the twins once awoken again.

New OC’s ^^
Maru and Koda©ME
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derived from a dream that I had last night.
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Tamorii's avatar
Such a lovely colorscheme :D Okay, here's your critique ~

Negatives
- The girl's ear is placed too far away of her eyes. Ears always are at the same heigth as your eyes, and they're placed the middle of your head- when seen from the side. Because of this her jaw too long aswell. It's a good thing you connected the line of the jaw on her ear (because that's how it is, your jaw goes to your ears) but because the ear is placed so far away her jaw is too long. The boy's ears and jaw are fine though :)
- When seen from the side, your chin is placed forward more then the space between your eyes. Here you made the chin go back so far that's now behind this space. So simply said, the chin should be placed a bit forward more.
- The way the wings are place is nearly impossible, like this they would be coming out of their arm- insteed of their back. Wings are placed between the should on the back, and they can bend on a few places. When drawing wings like this (each person 1 wing, pointing forward) you should draw a part of it going sideways, and the other part bending forward. It's simply not possible for wings to be placed like this ;)
- Lastly, something about the coloration. The colors you pick are very pretty and I really like this color scheme, but the drawing itself is a little flat. This because your shadings are too "soft". You should try to blur the edges of the shades less, and also add some even darker shades. This way your drawing will look less flat. Also, I can't really find a light source. This all might sound like a lot is wrong, but these are all only small things. Just keep practicing and work on what I said (:

Positives
- I'll say it once again: The color scheme is lovely! Black and gold is a really great match (:
- You've drawn and colored their hair very nice ~
- The idea of two persons, both with one wing and a history like this, is a very great idea and it really worked in your drawing :D I also think the birds and the letters are a nice add to the drawing.
- Overall you have a very cute and pretty style ;)

Keep practicing on the little things! And thank you for submitting to :iconcriticentrum: :D